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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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Most contemporary economies allow
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 a model of employment as being self-employed, which appears very tempting for many.
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 the vast majority of
people
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 opt for being employed in a
company
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 and not to set up their own
business
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.
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 essay will attempt to look into the key factors as to why
people
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 may prefer entrepreneurship and its major drawbacks to it. To start with, in many modern societies, including Russia, entrepreneurship is greatly encouraged with lots of
business
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 seminars and workshops advertised. These may range from slightly fraudulent to genuinely educational and supportive and generally any information on setting up a
company
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 is easily accessible for those who are willing. And willing they are, as a
business
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 person, the image itself has a certain feeling of luxury, respectability and success.
People
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 are being told that they have no limits and can easily become as wealthy as Steve Jobs if they wish it.
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, which is relevant for Russia and some other counties. Bank loans are accessible too, and they are largely eagerly granted. If a future
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 person truly knows their
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, it poses no threat.
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, easy access to setting up a
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 for someone inexperienced or insensible may cause a range of problems. Apparently, the
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 issue that may perplex an unskilled entrepreneur is the necessity to be a jack of all trades (if the
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 is very small). Having taken the responsibilities of an accountant, PR or HR manager at the same time can be a burden and make the person wish they had never done it at all. If they hire other
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 to perform these tasks, they must pay more taxes and provide their employees with decent working conditions. At the same time,
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 is usually a risky matter and in our competitive ,reality many of them go bankrupt. And
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, but not least - self-employed
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 are the only
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 responsible for their own vacations, sick or maternity leaves or any job perks. So, in a nutshell, being your own master has many downsides, and
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 why many
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 decide to play it safe.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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