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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment, only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#individuals #environment #governments #companies #difference
Teenagers
, the future of our
society
.
Teenagers
 are the backbone of our
society
 and that backbone should be strong so that one day they can support
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society
 and
there
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 families, for that to happen the important thing is they should understand
there
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responsibility
responsiblity
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responsibility
there
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 role in the
community
.
Community
service
 is one of the grand
stage
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 in which they can understand
there
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responsibility
responsiblity
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responsibility
, improve and be
a
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better
man
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/women
to
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the
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society
. Now,
community
service
 is of two types paid
community
service
 and unpaid
community
service
. As the name
suggest
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 in paid
community
service
teenagers
 are paid for
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community
 help and services. While
unaid
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unpaid
community
service
 is all about
experience
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. Both of these services are
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beneficial
benificial
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beneficial
 in
there
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 own way. Unpaid
community
service
 helps
the
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teenagers
 to understand
there
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 role in
the
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society
 and it helps them to understand that though money is important it is not the only thing which is essential in life. Helping and improving,
the
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society
 is the main objective of
unapid
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unpaid
rapid
community
service
. They make the
teenagers
 understand that money is an important aspect
for
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 upliftment, upliftment of
the
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society
 unbiased help is
also
 necessary . Apart from
this
, unpaid
community
 services
teaches
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the
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teenagers
 lot of skills that
acts
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 as a strong base for
there
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 future. Though unpaid
community
 work is necessary and important sometimes it is
also
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frustrating
frustating
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frustrating
 for
teenagers
 as they are not paid for it so it makes them question the work and
it's
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 importance. So the conclusion is though unpaid
community
 work provides
lot
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 of experience a small reward here and there will not hurt anybody and will raise
teenagers
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 spirit.
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  • sustainable practices
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  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
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