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It is more important to have a good family than to have friends. Family can always compensate for absence of friendship. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#friends #absence #friendship
Most
people
 think that family can fulfil every responsibility of
friends
. I totally disagree with the view. Because
people
 sometimes cannot say many things to their families about what happens to them. There is a between line family and
friends
. the community want to contribute experiences they have in a day to a close person to them. The close person inevitably can be a family member. A family member can understand their needs and ideas clearly since they share a common heritage genetically or environmentally.
Although
 siblings have a die-hard, some issues society has cannot interest any family member. Especially during adolescence, since a teenager has hard times, they do have not
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good relationship between them. Being a friend is a crucial issue for somebody. Since
people
 can develop many ideas about a world vision in the environment they live in,
friends
 in their surroundings affect their lives directly.
Although
 thinking, in the same way, is important for
people
, extending visions can be improved only with different ideas.
Consequently
, Family cannot fulfil any stuff that
friends
 share. We have to need a person to share our private life in a safe.
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