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The best way to solve the world's environmental problems is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#world #price #fuel
Fuel
,
one
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 of the most important
resource
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 known to humankind. Plays
a
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 important role in our
day to
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day-to-day
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day
 life. From cooking to flying, it has many usages as it is said, a coin is always
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two faced
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 same apply here . Even though
fuels
 have
there
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 advantages
it
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they
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also
have
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it's
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 disadvantages.
Fuels
 have helped humanity to reach heights which were never dreamed
off
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 before. From flying in
sky
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the sky
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 to walking on
moon
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the moon
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 everything humanity
has
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build
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 is all possible because of
fuels
 . But it
also
 has
it's disadvantages
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it disadvantages
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 when the
fuel
 is burned to perform a certain task it releases toxic gases which if not purified or controlled can cause harm to the planet, depletion of the ozone layer is a prime example of its destructive behaviour. Increasing the
price
 of
the
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fuel
 seems like
a
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 best way to control increasing world environmental problems but it is not a permanent solution, there is a limit to which
price
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the price
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 of
the
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fuel
 can be increased . If increased beyond the limit it will cause disbalance in the society as
fuel
 plays an important part in
day
 to
day
 life of every human being, rich can afford it easily the main part of the society which will be affected by the increase in the
price
 of the
fuels
 are the poor people. Increasing the
price
 is
a
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temporary government should look for
a
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more permanent
solutions
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solution
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 to environmental problems. People should look for a replacement
a
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of
the
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fuels
.
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