Some people today believe that it is acceptable to use physical force to discipline children, but others feel it is completely unacceptable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Parents believe that
discipline
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is most important to the development of
children
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.
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, opinions are divided on the
use
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of physical
force
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to
discipline
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children
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. Voices in
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believe that the
use
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of physical
force
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on
children
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yields results quickly.
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basic human nature that if
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doing something causes you
pain
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, you may not do that again.
This
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also
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applies to the
use
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of physical
force
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to
discipline
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children
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, because the
pain
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caused by the physical
force
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immediately imprints on the
child
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's mind.
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, if a
child
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is caught stealing and by the
use
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of physical
force
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, would immediately imprint on
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his or her mind that stealing is bad and if I do it again, I would be in
pain
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again. The downside to
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approach is that the
child
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may get hurt physically during the process.
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, those not in
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believe that the mental damage
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caused
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cause
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by the
use
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of physical
force
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is much more severe. Trust issues develop between the
children
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and the
guardian
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.
Children
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no longer share their problems with their guardians because the fear of persecution drives them away.
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, a
child
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being bullied at school will not share that experience with their
guardian
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, because the
guardian
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may
use
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physical
force
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.
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fear
also
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create
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future relationship issues between the
guardian
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and the
child
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.
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, the
child
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may not longer feel compelled to visit and spend time with their parents, because the memory and
pain
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of the physical
force
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is
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still imprinted in their mind. To conclude,
discipline
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is important,
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however
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we must
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teach
children
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to respect their guardians.
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, in my
opinion
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the
use
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of physical
force
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is unwarranted. We must
use
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alternative means to
discipline
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children
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.
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