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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime.other,however,argue that the circumstances of an individual crime,and the motivation for committing it,should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Disscuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Crime
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however
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 small or great should always be dealt with a fitting
punishment
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. A criminal in a fit of rage or sometimes in
self-
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defencedefence
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defence defence
 commits the
crime
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 but there is always a
motivation
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 behind any committed
crime
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. Judging people equally
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and not
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 taking into account the
motivation
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 behind the
crime
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 helps in maintaining the
crime
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 rate though it proves the point that everyone is equal in the eyes of law sometimes it's unfair to those who had no ulterior motives but the
crime
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 was just a result of
self-
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defencedefence
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defence defence
. For ,example if two criminals were charged with murder and
both
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 of them are judged equally though one of them has a clear motive behind the murder the
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 murder was just in
self-
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defencedefence
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defence defence
. though the
punishment
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 received by
both
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 of them is similar only their motives differ which makes the
punishment
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 more severe for one and fitting for the other. Judging criminals based on their
motivation
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 behind the
crime
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 is a great step towards a fitting and just
punishment
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. Though it is all right and just arises the problem of an increase in the
crime
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 rate . Some crimes are just committed in
self-
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defencedefence
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defence defence
 but as their
motivation
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 is
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 being considered the
punishment
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 will not be as harsh as it should be .
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 gives other criminals a strategy to get away with the
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 they just have to prove themselves to be innocent though the system is great it has its own flaws.
Both
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 of the systems are great when passing the judgement but
both
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 have their perks and disadvantages a mixture of the two will be the best fit for a system.

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