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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.
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Graphical diagrams below illustrate constructional changes that have taken place in West Park Secondary School since the year 1950.
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, most of the buildings have been removed and replaced throughout the years. In 1980, houses were demolished and a new building, which is called the science block, was constructed next to the school's main building. Other than that, the farmland area was changed to a sports field and a tiny area was dedicated to car parking which was located just next to the science block. In 2010, the whole sports field area was dedicated to the car park and a small portion of the playground was adjusted for the sports field. The car park is a huge construction change which did not even exist in 1950,
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 the main building of the school has remained unchanged for all these years. It looks like the playground has lost its importance and was made a bit smaller in the year 2010.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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