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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding changes. Others, However, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #lives #changes #change
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people
’s
life
. While some choose to live always performing the same role and executing the same activities, others prefer challenges and changes. In my way of thinking,
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 prefer to take some risks in order to make my
life
 a multi-aspect
one
.
However
, reasonings for both perspectives would be indicated in the following part of the essay. On the
one
 hand, some
people
prefer
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 spend a
life
 doing the same things.While having the same profession, or working
on
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 the same
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company
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 for an undetermined period of time, those
people
 rarely overcome their comfort zone. They not only know exactly what to expect from their job and how they are supposed to act, but
also
 enjoy spending their free time
doing
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executing activities from which they sense a particular type of pleasure and awards.
Moreover
,
people
 who choose a stable
life
 can predict what might happen in the future. Personally,
i
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 consider
this
 type of routine monotonous since there is no novelty in their days of living.
Conversely
, others, including me, choose an adventurous
life
 over the steady
one
. Not only
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 changes
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improve
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people
’s
senses
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 of
life
, but
also
 challenges help
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 how to cope with
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difficulties
diffuculties
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difficulties
. By leaving
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 comfort zone,
people
 tend to expose to
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numerous
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numerous
 stimuli, leading them to reveal their curiosity and discover their new talents and abilities. To illustrate
this
 idea, employees who do
job-hoping
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 might experience various fields of interest and find out what they enjoy the most.
Additionally
, travel-lovers who can experience many distinct beliefs and religions might be more creative in thinking and open-minded than
people
 who are in the group
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avoiding change. To abridge, while
i
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 agree that each view has its own effective arguments,
i
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 believe that changes can always be beneficial. When someone tries out new things,
explore
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 unknown places or applies for different jobs, several opportunities will become available and fulfil their potential.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • mastery
  • innovation
  • adaptability
  • personal growth
  • resilience
  • hesitancy
  • risk-taking
  • transitions
  • enrichment
  • equilibrium
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