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Bad behaviour like belching and unauthorised conduct should be discouraged in modern offices. Do you agree?

#behaviour #conduct #offices
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Bad
behaviour
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conduct has been an issue in the working
environment
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 for a long time. Modern offices are not new to these issues and they should be discouraged. Inappropriate
behaviour
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 and misconduct lead to disturbance in
work
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-life balance which in turn affects the
work
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 of an individual or organization, A company consists of employees of different races, gender and beliefs. There should be a proper hospitable
environment
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 in the working place which should help workers feel at ease any mischievous
behaviour
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 like discussing the social life of an employee, touching inappropriately, or releasing sounds and air from different body parts should not be allowed and encouraged. Taking
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 kind of
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 likely will result in an uninhabitable
environment
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 which will not produce any positive results and only hopes to produce a negative outcome,
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 kind of
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 if tolerated will affect the office and mindset of the employees. The
work
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environment
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 should be welcoming and lovely which increases the efficiency of the
work
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. As these activities create uneasiness among the employees and affect the working
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. A workplace should have proper rules of conduct and
behaviour
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 and anybody who is found guilty of
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behaviour
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 and breaking rules should be dealt with proper punishment. Misbehaving and ill-conduct sometimes have a very deep effect on a person's mind body and soul
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 should not be entertained. Workers should
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 in peace and like-mindedness which in turn not only increases the outcome and profit but
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 creates a healthy and pleasant workplace.
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