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Smacking children is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#children #form #discipline
In 2002 one
of
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the Malaysia television has
show
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 that some
parents
 believe that smacking their
children
 is the best part of making their
children
 more discipline. In
this
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 I will explain why
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punishment is not the right way to teach
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the behavior
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behavior
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 of
children
. Center for public mental health university of Gajah Mada
child’s
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 Psychological has
show
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 that young
children
 have difficulty speaking and have
bad
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 temper because
trauma
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the trauma
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 of their childhood.
Therefore
 young
children
 get insomnia, insecure and always feel unsafe. Some
parents
 think slapping is
a
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 best way to get
children
 more discipline, but the fact is little
children
 are too young to understand why their
behavior
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 is wrong and they will
have
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fear
on
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 repeating
such
 bad
behavior
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 and wouldn’t learn from it. Every
parents
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 want the best for their
children
.
However
, being
parents
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 is never an
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easy
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esay
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easy
 task. Many
parents
 still believe traditional method like
a
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smacking,
a
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punishment,
a
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beating or
a slapping
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slapping children
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children
is make
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they
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 more discipline and make cultivate good habits. But the
true
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 is that
traditional
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the traditional
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 method is not a solution, nothing but it
make
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 their problem worse . is true that
children
 need to have boundaries, but trying to use
this
 traditional method has to do nothing with teaching a child proper
behavior
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. To conclude, little
children
 are too young to get
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smacking
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of
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 their
behavior
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, they didn’t deserve smacking, beating or slapping. Raising them with love because
children
 learn a lot by watching their
parents
.
Parents
 become good role models for their
children
 and Parenting does not only affect our
children
, but it affects our maturity as well.
Therefore
, in my
opinion
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 smacking
children
 must be forbidden.
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