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In the future، nobody will buy printed newspaper or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

#future، #nobody #newspaper #books
There has been much discussion revolving around the issue of whether printed
books
 will be replaced by the online version, due to the increasing cost of
books
 and newspapers, compared to free electronic
books
. I tend to believe that
e-book
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 are going to be the
first
 choice of most
people
 for the following reasons.
To begin
 with, in near future, with
fast
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advance
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advances
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of
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in
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 technology and enhancements in
communication
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the communication
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 era,
people
 would be able to access
to
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the internet in a
more
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easier way than
the
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 past, and with
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negligible
neglegible
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a neglegible
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 amount of charge,
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a citizen
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citizen
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citizens
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 can read
vast
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 number of
books
 without being worry about their budget. Whereas, printed
version
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 of
books
 can be considered much more expensive and charge
people
 heavily day by day.
As a result
, the residents prefer to read electronic and online
books
, as
this
 choice benefits them
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regarding their expenses, and
consequently
, the printed ones would be eliminated in upcoming years. Aside from the financial part, from the
environmentalists
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environmentalist's
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 point of view, the merit of
this
 solution are
considerablly
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considerably
 a lot. They argued that for producing just one mere book, approximately one or two trees must be cut down totally,
therefore
, due to the long-term effect of
this
 particular process, a considerable number of trees have been destroyed. Taking the jungle of north of Iran as an example, in just recent years, more than half of the trees within a particular area of Mazandaran
provience
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province
, which have existed for centuries, now have lost completely under the control of
paper
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 factory situated near that
eraa
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area
era
.
Thus
,
this
 alteration from printed to online
books
 would be a reasonable solution and by taking
this
 issue into consideration,
people
 will change their attitude toward using
books
, and step by step , the number of citizens using the printed version will substantially decrease. In summary,
the
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electronic publications are by far the best mean of Reading
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 to
the
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handmade
books
, due to
its
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 advantages
such
 as being more affordable and
its
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their
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 eco-friendly feature.
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