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Computers have changed the way people study. What are the advantages and disadvantages of using computers as study aid?

#computers #people #study #aid
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In
this
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 modern era, education has changed radically and one important factor
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this
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 change is technology. Today,
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 have changed the way people study. In
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 essay, we will discuss
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the pros and cons of using
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computers
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 as
study
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 aid.
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,
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 are helping
students
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 to retrieve important information for their studies and
researches
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. With the help of
internet
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,
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 on the link
Wikepedia
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Wikipedia
, we get
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 of information which
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 very helpful and useful for
students
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. On the other side,
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 are helping people to make
good
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presentation
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 of their assignments,
students
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 can type their work on
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 application and they only need to print and submit them to their teachers.
Computers
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 have memory storage which can help to save
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 of information, so
students
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 do not need
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 of books and copy books which can be cumbersome to carry. Now with
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, e-learning
is become
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 more present in
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 of institutions. During covid-19, when there was
the
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 lockdown,
computers
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 and the internet have been very helpful for
students
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.
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, teachers did online teaching which did not interrupt the completion of their syllabus and
students
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 were eventually on track with their school years academy.
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,
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 are essential tools in the workplace nowadays, it is better that children become
conversent
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conversant
 with
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 tool at a younger age which will be useful later in their career path.
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,
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 have some adverse effects, while reading notes on
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 can affect the vision of kids and can
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 give headaches. Sometimes, children do not make good use of
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, they often play games and view unsuitable videos. So, parental control is very important when young people access
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. In conclusion, I believe that the advantages of using
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 while studying
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 more significant than the disadvantages.
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 are definitely bringing many facilities to
students
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 and teachers.
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, parents and schools should be cautious
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 what
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 are exposed
when
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 using
computers
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.
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