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Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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These days, many
people
 believe that propaganda induced society to buy unnecessary
items
. others assume that it is a genuine
way
 to keep
people
 updated on new products that would make daily life easier.
this
 essay is going to explain the reason why advertisements should be considered to be a tool which leads
people
 to spend money unnecessarily. There are many reasons why
people
 think that what the market sells is always useful.
Firstly
, is well known that new generations are always looking for the easiest solution to address tasks.
Secondly
, the
way
 that products are presented induced the buyer to believe that the sponsored object is always the best.
For instance
, a knife is good enough to cut any kind of fruit but many prefer to use an apple cutter.
On the other hand
, propaganda is a
way
 to trick
people
's brains to enrich business in many ways.
To begin
 with, the marketing team studies
people
's habits and follows up on the results offering to the customers what they are looking for,
for example
 monitoring social media.
Moreover
, we leave in a world
that is
 attracted by fancy
items
 used by known
people
therefore
, if a person with many followers on Instagram is using specific
items
 most likely, many of his followers would buy that same product despite
is
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 not
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. In conclusion, advertisements used to be a window to genuinely display new
items
 years ago. during the past decades,
this
 practice has been perfectionated in order to manipulate
people
's choices in fact, many refuse to accept
this
 concept and continue to believe it is a fair
way
 to share information.
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