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You have a full-time job and you are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to your teachers. In your letter describe the situation explain why you cannot continue at this time say what action you would like to take

#job #course #teachers #situation #time #action
Dear Mr. James and Mrs. Sally, I am writing
this
 e-mail with the intent of
notify
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 you, and the school, about my decision
of leaving
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to leave
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 the business course. As I mentioned early
this
 year, I've been
emplyed
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employed
full time
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full-time
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 in a restaurant in Perth. From the very beginning up
untill
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until
 now, I have been able to manage my shift according
with
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 the school hours.
However
,
due to
 the shortage of staff, I was asked to cover all the night
shift
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shifts
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through out
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 the week. Unfortunately, my new rostered hours are going to take time from my study
therefore
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, I am looking in to suspend my course with
immendiate
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immediate
 effect. Going through the school policies I read that fees could be
refound
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 with
tree
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three
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weeks
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 notice. As I anticipated the fee for the coming trimester, I was
wandering
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 if it is possible to be
reinbourse
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reimbursed
reimburse
.
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Looking
Loolking
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Looking
 forward to hearing from you, Kind regards Jess
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Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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