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Some People claims that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement.

#people #claims #waste #homes #governments #requirement
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It's apparent that we need to recycle more of things which are found in
rubbish
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the rubbish
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 because our resources are restricted and leaving them in our environment can lead to ecological
damages
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. One part of society believes that
governments
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 should make strict laws to obligate people for recycling their waste from home. Overall, I agree with
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 claim and I think
governments
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 can play a vital role in protecting our earth from pollution. In the following essay, my reasons are going to be outlined and a few examples will be mentioned.
Firstly
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, an important reason for
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 claim is that
governments
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 are responsible to provide proper environmental conditions for nations.
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, they must make strong laws to have
effective
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an effective
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 role
on
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in
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 various aspects of
consuming
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consumption
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.
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, they can make rules for using
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particular
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a particular
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 material in
boxing
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the boxing
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 of foods or other things. Another significant reason is that the resources of energy are limited, so we should protect them and find renewable sources
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 of them. The
governments
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 can carry out
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 corporately and obligate people to decrease
consumption
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their consumption
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 of some harmful
material
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materials
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.
Beside
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, they should provide replacing sources. On the other side, we can use some waste from
home
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homes
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 like
papers
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paper
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 and plastics several times by recycling them.
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, leaving them in
environment
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the environment
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 can be certainly harmful
for
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to
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 fauna and other creatures. In conclusion, the government can make laws for recycling some waste materials which can help us to decrease wasting our resources and prohibit destroying the earth.
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, all of us shouldn't forget our responsibilities to maintain living places for the
next
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 generations.
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