Now a day the surveillance is happening at almost all public places. Is it good or perceived bad by people? What are advantages and disadvantages?

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good or bad - Google track/privacy/

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unwanted promotion/ Public security is paramount for every nation.

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, mostly all public

places

are being monitored with specialized cameras and people's activities

tracked

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. Just as every coin has a flip side

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surveillance brings both positive as well as negative

impact

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on our life. I would discuss both the pros and cons of

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concept but

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educidate

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that

advantages

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on any

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outweigh

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. Surveillance has myriad merits. The

first

and predominant one is the reduction

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crime

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rate

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significantly decreased especially in public

places

in the

last

few years. At initial, the crimes

for example

murders,

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shoplifting

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shop lifting

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, robberies,

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burgulary

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burglary

etc were difficult to track and criminals always had a way to escape and they are not shy away

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committing

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commiting

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committing

crime

. Now, the situation has changed, everybody is being monitored properly by police to reduce the

crime

rate

. To exemplify

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point, I would quote an example of Mumbai's terrorist attack in 1993 that killed thousands of people and every attack was on public

places

such

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, parks, and markets. If those

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Surveillance
Security
Crime prevention
Footage
Public safety
Privacy concerns
Consent
Distrust
Behaviour
Data management
Data breaches
Misuse of information
Targeting
Socio-political tensions

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Now a day the surveillance is happening at almost all public places. Is it good or perceived bad by people? What are advantages and disadvantages?

Fully explain your ideas

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some people believe that professionals such as doctors and engineers should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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