Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned, while others think people should be free to choose. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, many dangerous
sports
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has been introduced among youngster compared to the past. There are two opposing opinions
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one group demands the prohibition of these dangerous
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while
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others think that it is
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will of an individual.
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this
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essay
illustrate
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both
view points
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viewpoints
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and
stating
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my opinion that there should not be any restrictions
for
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this
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kind
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of
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sports
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sport
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Human
life
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is precious and it cannot be gambled for any
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life threatening
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activities.
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, there are so many
dangeroussports
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dangerous sports
like zip line, buggy jumping,
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and Sky
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dive
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which creates enthusiasm among
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. Many youth listed these
sports
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in their bucket list. But the worst part is, it has a high risk of
life
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if proper safety measures
not
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are not
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followed.
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,
bull fighting
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bullfighting
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is so dangerous and even takes
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life
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the life
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of many spectators
as well as
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participants. For
such
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kind
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kinds
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of
sports
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, governments can impose
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ban
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a ban
the ban
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.
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many experienced trainers risked their
life
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in these
sports
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.
Probability
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of causalities is
high
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higher
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in
these
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these kinds
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kind
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of
sports
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rather
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apply
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than
normal
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ones.
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,
those
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general public that participate
are
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not aware
about
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the repercussion
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repercussion
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repercussions
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of these activities.
This
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is a wrong message to the public as a whole.
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, people can have the freedom to choose
which ever
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whichever
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sports
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that are suitable for them
as
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based on their interests. Adventure is in the blood where no one can stop.
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Also
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these
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this kind
these kinds
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kind
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of
sports
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boost courage and perseverance, which are few vital qualities needed for human
being
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beings
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.
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, there is no point
to put
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ban
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the ban
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in
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on
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these
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this kind
these kinds
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kind
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of extreme
sports
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. To recapitulate, it is a controversial topic whether to allow or
ban
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among the public. In my opinion, choosing
a
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a sport
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sports
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is
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all
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apply
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depends
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depend
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depend on
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one's own risk appetite and interest
where
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and
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no government can impose
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ban
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a ban
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over
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on
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that. Prohibitions of
these
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this kind
these kinds
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kind
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of
sports
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lead to illegal action without safety measures will cause
much
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many
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more casualties than
this
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.
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these activities must be conducted with proper safety measures.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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