Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Abortion
is always a sensitive topic for every country, especially the country that the religion is important as
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as the law. Some people believe that
abortion
is nothing but
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decision while some people respect the
rights
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women
's bodies.
This
essay will show you the season why
abortion
should be legal. Somehow the greatest responsibility is responsible
of
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for
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the things we have done, but
abortion
is not
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on
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the list of
responsibility
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responsibilities
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.
For example
, people may enjoy having sex without protection but
instead
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of keeping
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the baby, they
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decide
deciede
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decide
to have
abortion
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an abortion
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to push their
problem
aways
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away
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.
Moreover
,
abortion
is the worst sin in
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the country
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country
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countries
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that
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where
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religion is
stick
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a stick
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and significant like Thailand and
Philippine
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Philippines
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, where
the
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religion is glorious. From my point of view, we couldn't say that the termination of pregnancy is
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immoral responsibility when many
reseachs
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researches
research
researchers
show that there are many
problem
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problems
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come
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that come
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after unintentional pregnancy.
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as
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physical health and mental health
problem
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problems
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after
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an
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and
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an
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illegal
abortion
, unqualified population, the violence in
family
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the family
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, etc.
Furthermore
,
women
should have the
rights
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right
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on
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to
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their bodies, not anyone else.
Women
's
right
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rights
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are important
as
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same as human
rights
. In conclusion, I definitely agree that
abortion
should be legal because it is the right thing to do to support
women
's
rights
and it can prevent the
problem
that could come after an illegal
abortion
.
Furthermore
, under the law that
abortion
was legal, the individuals who think that
abortion
is not
right
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the right
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thing to do still can take their own decision not to have an
abortion
. It is human
rights
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right
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.
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