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In companies’ promotions to high positions should be given to employees inside the company, not to someone from outside or new hiring. Do you agree or disagree?

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Private co-operations and public sectors have different
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strategies
 to retain their
staff
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 as providing allowances,
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 and promotions.It is an area of debate about whether
increment
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 should be given to senior employees who have worked for the company or new recruits.In my opinion,I
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agree
argue
 that it
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should
 be to those
staff
 who have been working for the company.It can be used as a way to retain experienced learned people in the
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work place
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 as well as promote motivation among
staff
 to work harder.
By increasing
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 the positions of
staff
 to a higher state helps sustain and retain
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senior and experienced employees.
The positive
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 reinforcement helps an individual stay in the workplace with
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 position which will include more pay and benefits.In that way,the company is
benefited
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 as the senior employees feel content with the work they do.Take Bhutan as an example.When the private
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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