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An organisation has given an advertisement for part time volunteering job for local children. Write a letter to the administrator of the organisation in your letter introduce yourself Why you think you are suitable for this. Job State when you will be able to join

#organisation #advertisement #part #time #job #children #administrator
Dear Mr John, I am writing
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 the volunteer work which you have advertised in the local newspaper. I’m happy to share my details so that you can make a team according to
the
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 needs. I’m Santosh Srinivas who is 20 years old doing my
Bachelors
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 of Computers at the Perth
Sate
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 University and
participate
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 in the volunteer programs related to
university
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. I feel I will be
the
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 suitable person for the job with
the
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 previous experience at the “Childcare Foundation” which is a non-profit organisation and do free service jobs in collecting funds, giving seminars and organising stalls at the events. Because of my semester exams commencing
from
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next
 week I will be busy preparing for my exams and will be available
in
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the
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from the
first
 week of November, with the finish of exams I can participate more actively which helps to get a good break from
routine
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 college schedule. I look forward to
hear
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 from you soon. Regards Santosh.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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