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Some people give more importance to artists ( painters, writers, musicians) in the current age of rapidly developing technology and science. What do you think? Do people prefer arts to technology in your view?

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The strong emphasis on
education
 from Vietnamese citizens and its government, combined with positive economic growth, an emerging wealthy middle class, and a clear drive from the central government to foster and develop a skilled labour force has resulted in Vietnam becoming an attractive destination for promoting international
education
. Simultaneously, in recent years, an increasing number of people demand
for
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studying international certificates as well as
education
 consultancy for higher
education
.
Therefore
, international
education
 has indeed become a potential industry.
However
, while the appearance of the covid 19 has had a severe impact on traditional
education
 methods, the pandemic has had a positive effect on the developmental orientation of online learning at the Vietnamese higher
education
 level.
This
 is a prerequisite for the development of online
education
 and the innovation of digital technology in
education
. In short, our team is eager to gain a deeper understanding of the current landscape for the international
education
 industry, fortunately, we had a chance to work directly in Vuong Gia Dat Viet joint stock company as an intern.
This
 is
such
 a great opportunity for our team to learn and apply the knowledge I have learned to real-life practice in the Marketing department. To complete
this
 report, we would like to thank the Faculty of International Business - Foreign Trade University. Especially, as Master Tran Bich Ngoc, thank you for all your enthusiasm, dedication to supporting informative knowledge, and practical experience .
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