University should accept equal number of males and females students in every subject. Do you agree or disagree?

In
this
contemporary era, gender discrimination has always been an issue among people. Some administrations argued that there should be an equivalent amount of girls and boys in colleges. I entirely disagree with
this
notion and think that admissions should be based on one's capabilities.
First
of all, I believe that tertiary education should be according to the potential of people as
students
have different skills. To be precise , learning capacity varies from
student
to
student
and every
student
is not good in all subjects.
For example
, a recent survey found that 89% of girls excelled in nursing but boys have more interest in engineering, so
that is
totally up to the
students
. Along
this
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this
,
students
may not be able to get desirable results if they are forced to do any subject that they are not wanted to do and
consequently
, their career would be in danger. In Japan,
for instance
, grades have declined to 45% since they have chosen equal numbers of males and females in colleges. After facing
this
drastic catastrophe in the study, the Japanese government have to change
this
system where
students
are allowed to select subjects according to their interests. In conclusion, I strongly believe that pursuing a career according to the
student
's choice would be more beneficial to them in order to make their future bright.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender equality
  • merit-based selection
  • academic performance
  • potential
  • interest
  • aptitude
  • diverse perspectives
  • enriching classroom discussions
  • learning experiences
  • practical implementation
  • gender ratio
  • historical disparities
  • underrepresented genders
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