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Globalization has brought about more positive economic impacts than negative ones. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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globalisation
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 around the world,
economy
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 has been impacted positively.
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 the negative causes can happen, I reckon that its significant impact is undeniable in the world economy and the wealth of
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many societies. One compelling argument stems from the idea
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that acceleration of
globalisation
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 has been a key factor not only
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 the boundaries of the current countries but
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worldwide;
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, almost all of the tech geeks of the world are in the USA,
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 the east parts of the globe are the active users of their products and by
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, learning
english
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 language has been a must for the countries that want learn the news as they released and keep up with it properly.
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, knowing the importance of
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cutting-edge technology and implementing its use demands
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global awareness
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 a driving force for being globalised.
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, pursuing
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 a lot can take a toll on the
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society
societies
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society
 that it can
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 the attention that
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 gives itself. In the comprehensive explanation, the risk of using their language less or trying to gain other nations' beliefs can be the crucial
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, when the activities of
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 pot are willing to occur, the people living there must keep everything in control. To sum up, after considering
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, I really believe that if people can have everything in control and uses
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 circumstance properly, they will end up with great outcomes both in the economy and in the development of the relationships among countries.
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