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some people believe that it is the best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

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 of their dream and try to improve current living
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 it is considered that they can adapt to every situation and get used to bad circumstances around them, I consider that individuals should try to do their best in every situation.
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, we should not accept situations,
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, because it can lead to personal degradation and poor level of thinking. If we try our best to change the situation
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 better way and become more industrious and enhance our level of thinking.
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, your brain can extend its horizon, which is essential to
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, there are plenty of advantages of becoming a hard-working person affecting mental health and leadership skills.
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 have to work a lot after lessons and they get used to
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. They do not pay attention to the salary of work, experience and knowledge gained from
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, well-experienced
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 gain more than those who used to get all things without asking and trying.
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 can utilize their experience to the good side, because practices are more necessary than theory at university. To summarize my ideas, people with clear goals should try to manage their time and overcome challenges. All illustrious persons in
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 experienced hard times in
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result changed their mindsets and maintain excellent knowledge.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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