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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary forgovernments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disgaree with this opinion ?

#countries #people #health #food #forgovernments #tax #disgaree
Especially, those living
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undevoloped
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undeveloped
developed
 countries and developing countries tend to consume
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junk
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jank
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junk
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food
to
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too
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 much.
Those
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 condition causes
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extreme
extrem
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an extrem
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 number of problem that we do not imagine. To me, governments are supposed to take action about
this
 problem. By raising
tax
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the tax
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of
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on
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junk
food
, consumers are able to
direckt
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direct
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healthy
healty
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healthy
food
 and so
countries
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countries'
country's
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 health
expense
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expenses
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 would decrease.
Secondly
,
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governments
government
goverments
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governments
 get extra income from
junk
food's
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food
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taxes
tax
taxs
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tax
. Nowadays,
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majority
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the majorty
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majorty
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majority
 of people encounter economic crises in their daily life. As
the
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time rolls,
on
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this
 problem spread all around to world.
Economist
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Economists
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 indicate that the selling of
product
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products
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 taken extra
taxs
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taxes
tax
 drop out obviously. Even though, some
of
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humans
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the humans
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 give up their
adddiction
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addiction
 due to
taxs
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taxes
tax
.
Cigaratte
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Cigarette
 addiction is
desciribed
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described
one
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as one
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 of the hardest
addiction
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addictions
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 for
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the consumer
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consumer
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consumers
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.Despite
this
 fact , with the economic trouble consumers have to
be give
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give
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 up
tabacco
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tobacco
Tabacco
. After that
methot
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method
Methot
, doctors impart that at the same time, the rate of cancer
decrease
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 with
usage
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the usage
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 of
cigaratte
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cigarette
cigarettes
.
Fourtunetly
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Fortunately
,
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government
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
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economy
economic
economi
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economic
 approach
effect
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affect
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 public health indirectly. If
same
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the same
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 politica is applied
over
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to
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 fast
food
endustry
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industry
ıt
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it
 may
results
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result
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like
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in
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example
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the example
an example
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 of
tabacco
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tobacco
Tabacco
. With the commence of 21. centuries, humans life style and profile change
compeletly
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completely
. İn the old times, most
of
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humans
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the humans
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 prefer to make their
food
 on their own. Even those living village produce their vegetables and fruits
byself
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myself
.Without taking any help, most of
person
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the person
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 subsist on their basic domestic
works
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work
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.But nowadays, most
of
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people
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the people
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 do not prefer
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healthy
health
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a healty
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healty
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healthy
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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. İnstead of caring
fruits
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for fruits
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 and vegetables on their own they take their products from markets.
Goverments
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Governments
Government
 should realize
this
 fact and make
it
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its
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 money.
Unbeliaveble
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Unbelievable
 number of
junk
 foods are sold at market.By taking tax
from
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on
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 fast
food
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governments
goverments
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governments
 gain extra income.
As a result
, Without any doubt
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governments
goverments
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governments
 are supposed to take higher
taxs
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taxes
from
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on
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junk
food
. It is good for public health or
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government
governments
government's
goverments
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government
 income.
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