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Everyone should stay in school until the age of eighteen. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#school #age #eighteen
In most education systems worldwide,
students
 today have to complete their education until they are 18 years old.
Although
this
 yields many benefits, arguments have been saying everyone should leave
school
 before eighteen. Despite numerous opinions,
this
 essay will
further
 discuss both sides.
To begin
 with, young
people
 are recommended to finish high
school
 because they do not have enough knowledge and awareness in daily life.
Moreover
, before eighteen years old,
students
 do not reach the age of majority, so their sense of integrity is not strong, and they lack general knowledge to deal with real-world issues.
However
,
on the other hand
, by providing these problems with an opportunity to change, the
school
 allows youth to develop their education and social skills.
For instance
,
students
 have to work with multiple situations since
school
 is seen as a miniature society.
Therefore
, young
people
 can grow up with solid soft skills and a proper attitude toward others.
However
, leaving
school
 early gives young
people
 more time to practice and gain experience in their chosen major.
In addition
, more than half of the class lessons are theory-based learning;
hence
 for the
students
 who follow careers requiring particular learning,
complete
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 high
school
 is unnecessary. Not only
this
 but
also
 young
people
 have to have a lot of subjects, which reduces the time needed to focus on training their concern for the future job. In
conclude
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,
students
 can choose what path they want to go
future
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. If they have passion and skill in subjects that do not require
to
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them to
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 graduate from
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high school
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highschool
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, the public and parents should allow young
people
 to leave
school
 early and focus on their chosen majors.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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