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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is believed that impediments
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 social and practical matters when living abroad can be caused by the obligatory usage of
local
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language
. From my perspective, the statement above is absolutely true, as even though you could know the
language
 flawlessly,
language
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 barrier can appear in stressful situations, resulting in very serious
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First
 of all, getting a job could be a lot more complicated as competing for the same position is much
bothersome
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 with someone that has used a given
language
 his whole life than with a person that has not. It is in an employer's business to hire the best candidate and knowing
perfectly
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 mandatory
language
 is
one
 of the greatest amenities that
one
 can have.
Thus
, that could result in getting a much worse job than you would get in your homeland.
Secondly
, your relations with other local people would not be as good as if you used your
first
language
.
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 your accent or mispronunciations could bring along many misunderstandings. Mastering a
language
 is
one
 thing but having a good accent is another.
For instance
, two words can be written very
similarly
 but
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 much differently, –40minut– when learning the
language
, especially when someone does it by themselves, you could be unaware of
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 right pronunciation,
therefore
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 that as a completely disparate word.
Also
, using a foreign
language
 can take away from you gigantically important values that you have in your native
language
,
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 when it comes to interpersonal relations
such
 as
great
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 sense of humour or being quick-witted. In conclusion, speaking
other
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language
 than your
first
one
,
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 can make finding work enormously harder and can complicate getting along with others.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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