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There has been a dramatic growth in the number of people studying at universities in the last few decades. While some people see this as a positive trend which raises the general level of education within the community, others fear that it is lowering the quality of education. What are the advantages and disadvantages of the increase in student numbers at university?

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The
number
 of tertiary
students
 has surged
for
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over
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 the past few decades. Some say that
this
 trend contributes to pushing up the average level of
education
 in society, but others say
this
 affects the standard of
education
.
This
 essay aims to enlighten us regarding the effects of
this
 development. If the
number
 of
students
 increases,
this
 may create a huge gap in the ratio between teachers and
students
, meaning teachers cannot take care of
students
 very well. Teachers could have given a hand to
students
 who were failing when the
number
 of
students
 was lower, but they may not anymore in
such
 a case as the growing
number
 of
students
.
Hence
, the growth in student numbers might erode the quality of
education
.
On the other hand
, the growing
number
 of
university
students
 may contribute to society as a whole. Generally speaking, the
students
 who have finished degrees are more
skillful
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 than those who did not complete higher
education
. With
this
, societies would have more chances to hire highly skilled employees if the proportion of
university
graduates
 gets bigger. Indeed, some data shows that developed countries
such
 as the USA and Japan have more
university
graduates
 than emerging countries
such
 as Cambodia and Myanmar, indicating that the more
university
graduates
, the more mature economies countries can achieve. Even though there may be some drawbacks of the said phenomenon,
such
 as widening the gap between A-
students
 and the rest, I believe that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages because the growth in the
number
 of
university
graduates
 is highly likely to contribute to the furtherance of the economy of a country.
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