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*Some peope say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy somethings. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. *Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#*some #peope #somethings #people #attention #*discuss
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In today’s modern society, through advertising strategies to attract
customers
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, more and more items are sold by ingenious sellers who have a clear strategy for their commercial products.
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, it is considered by some that they have seen a significant increase in the number of
advertisements
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 with the goal is to get consumers to purchase a targeted product, while there are others who think that
advertisements
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 are too prevalent so nobody pays
attention
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 to these commercials. In my opinion, I believe that modern
customers
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 become indifferent to advertising. On the one hand, many think that
advertisements
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 are one of the reasons that attract
people
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 to buy something.
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 is because, generally, eye-catching
advertisements
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 can act as a strong persuasion device in order to irritate
people
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 to buy
goods
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 or services.
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,
people
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 hesitate about buying a new car from luxurious brands
such
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 as Mercedes or Lexus. If these brands do not have any
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 for these cars,
people
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 will not give any
attention
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 to purchasing the car from
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 brand.
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, the messages from these
advertisements
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 can give dwellers a strong feeling about the items to stimulate them to purchase
goods
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.
On the other hand
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,
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according
 to some,
advertisements
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 will no longer exist because they are too popular to attract
people
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instead
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 of other things. In the modern day, it is not difficult to see many kinds of
advertisements
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such
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 as leaflets, posters or digital
advertisements
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,
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, these forms do not have any creativities to make
people
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 pay more
attention
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.
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, when we go on the streets, it is simple for
people
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 to see lots of
advertisements
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 for
goods
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 or services but they do not have any special points to make them unique which just have some sentences with a huge
image
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images
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 and
colorful
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colourful
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colors
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colours
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, in my opinion, advertising has become a part of our life and
therefore
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 does not attract our
attention
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 as before.
This
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 problem is because modern
people
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 know that the information provided in
advertisements
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 is unreliable.
Beside
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 that, some items or
goods
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, which are advertised on these posters or leaflets, do not have
high-quality
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high quality
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 and the value they bring to
people
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 is not enormous enough. In conclusion,
although
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 advertising can be paid
attention
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 to
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people
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 as before, it is still prevalent because
customers
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 can buy these things through
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advertisements
advertisement
advertiements
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advertisements
.
However
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, sellers and
designer
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designers
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 should understand
clients’s
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clients’
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 emotions and the way how to attract more
customers
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.
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