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Students should focus on learning in the classroom rather than show their status by wearing fashionable clothes. Therefore, all students have to wear school uniforms. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is widely known that the main duty of
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 is studying and concentrating on education
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 of focusing on dressing up for
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. For that reason, some believe that every student should wear
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uniforms
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, and I completely agree with
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 suggestion. In
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 essay, I will explain why all young people in the
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 should wear
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 ,not private
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Firstly
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,
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uniforms
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 save
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 in the mornings. Of all other morning routines, in my view, deciding which outfit to wear takes most of the
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. Especially, as appearance is a big topic for teenagers, they can spend the longest
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changing their
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 to fit in their social groups or impress their peers.
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,
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time
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 can be used for their education if
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time
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-consuming task every morning is already fixed.
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, wearing a
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 uniform helps pupils to use their
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 more efficiently and wisely.
Secondly
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,
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uniforms
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 reduce unnecessary stress and concerns about their clothes.
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, there are always some people from high-income families, while there are
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opposites. These disadvantaged children might feel excluded or inferior to
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others. Not only the children but their families might suffer from the pressure about the costs of presentable attires. These issues can distract the
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 as well as lower their grades. In conclusion, wearing a uniform reduces
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 in the busy mornings by helping
students
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 to choose their
outfits
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 more quickly.
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,
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uniforms
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removes
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 inequality and
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students
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 from low-income households with a stress-free environment.
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, I believe
students
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 can concentrate better on education in
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uniforms
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 than in private
outfits
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.
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