Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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recieved
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personnel
who
considers sharing life's knowledge is of no use to employers and is completely useless. Correct pronoun usage
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion