You are due to move into a rented apartment next month but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter, explain your situation describe your problems tell him/her when you think you can move in

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Dear Linda, As you know I have rented one of your

apartment

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at 2502 Millwoods road. I am afraid to tell you, I won't be able to move

month as I recently got an injury. I've been working in one of our branches in Vancouver.

Last

Friday, when I was leaving from the work I have fallen down

from

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the stairs. Due to

this

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,this

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my right ankle got fractured and as per

doctor's

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the doctor's

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advice

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I am not able to walk or lift anything heavy. My pain was unbearable so I ended up putting

plaster

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a plaster

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on.

However

, I took advice from my doctor and they told me total recovery will take about two months. So, I was wondering will we can move the advance amount to the deposit for May month. As I will be taking accommodation in Millwood after two months. I hope you will understand my circumstances and revert me back shortly. Thanks, Kanny

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

156 words

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You are due to move into a rented apartment next month but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter, explain your situation describe your problems tell him/her when you think you can move in

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged others believe that children .Who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and and give your own opinion.?

Universities should accept equal members of male and female in every subject.Do you agree or disagree ?

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