Buying things on the internet, such as books, air tickets, and groceries is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

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recent years, we have noticed that the way of buying things has changed where there is no need to go
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shops, libraries or even groceries to get
clothes
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, books and food. Nowadays, online shopping is very common,
people
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can buy
clothes
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, books, air tickets and groceries easily by ordering online. We will discuss
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the pros of
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statement and whether they outweigh the cons. In
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busy world, technologies have brought many new concepts which are providing lots of facilities to many
people
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. One of them is online shopping,
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by
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one click on a
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smartphone
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smart phone
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,
people
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can buy
clothes
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, books, food and many other products.
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, buying online can be disappointing as well, it may happen that the product bought does not meet the criteria or the image as presented on the website. I remember having bought a dress online, but when I received it, it was completely different from what I selected online.
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, buying through
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is
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killing little trades,
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many shops and businesses are closing down, leading to many
people
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being unemployed. On the other side, buying online can be very convenient for someone who has some
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disabilities
disabilties
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disabilities
. There is no need for
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person to go
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town to get his groceries,
clothes
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and newspapers, he can buy all his
stuffs
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online.
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,
people
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are very busy to go in a travel agent to buy air tickets, nowadays booking air tickets
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done through
internet
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the internet
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. Inadvertently, there could be some danger while making online shopping, like ripping off, some
people
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with bad intentions put a false shopping online link and steal
money
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of
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people
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who purchase their products displayed on the web site.
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,
people
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are no more going to queue in bank halls. With internet banking,
people
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can easily transfer money to different accounts. In conclusion, online shopping is very trendy due to
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facilities it provides to the citizens. I believe that buying online will continue to progress and improve its services.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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