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It is argued that getting married before finishing school or getting a job is not a good choice. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#school #job #choice
Caribbean
islands
,
one
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are one
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 of the most visited
place
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places
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 in the world. The
graph
 describes
tourists
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tourist
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 visits in
this
 part of the world from 2010 to 2017. The
tourists
 were basically divided into two communities,
one
 portion prefers to stay on the cruise
ship
 while
other
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the other
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 visited the island. From the
graph
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 it can be concluded that from 2010 - 2017,
one
 has only seen the rise of visitors in
this
 part of the world. From the
graph
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 we can interpret that from 2010-2015 most of the visitors tend to visit the
islands
 rather than
staying
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stay
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 on ships. Though ,we have seen
consistent
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 rise in
number
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a number
the number
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 of
people
 that tend to stay on the
ship
 from 2012 to 2017, with the
population
 of
people
 staying on the
ship
 surpassing the
population
 of
people
 visiting the
islands
 in 2016. With the increase in tourist activities,
one
 could assume the number of
people
 visiting the
islands
 will increase but we have only seen
linear
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graph
 in most of that part from 2013 to 2015, the visitor activity increased from 2 million to 2.75 million but the
population
 of
tourists
 visiting the
islands
 remained the same. Whereas
significant
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a significant
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 increase in
population
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the population
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 of
tourists
 that prefer to stay on
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the ship
a ship
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ship
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ships
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 was observed.
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