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Some people believe that people who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV. To what extend do you agree or disagree ?

#people #books #imagination #language #skills #tv
______________________________________________________ It is believed by some individuals that language learners can get more dates and imagination from reading
books
 while others think that watching foreign movies on TV is affordable. Personally , I completely disagree with
this
 opinion and think reading is the best way for students to improve their knowledge.
First
 of all , reading
books
 is
comfortable
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 and effective way to improve
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person’s
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people
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.
In other words
 , when individuals read some types of magazines and novels , they look
differently
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to
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 the world
who
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 differ from others with his or her opinion.
Moreover
 , they think about the advantages and the advantages before doing everything.
For example
 , scientists advise to people which read a few
time
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,
nevertheless
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you
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 do not have extra time. If learners plan to read
books
 in 15 minutes daily , they never need to work as a day-
layborer
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labourer
.
Secondly
 , students can improve their
grammar
with
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 reading
grammar
books
 like Cambridge
Grammar
books
. If individuals have
an
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enough knowledge including
grammar
 and affordable opinions,
who
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they
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 can easily speak and understand foreign languages. In their speech maybe not
any
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 mistakes. Takes the famous IELTS tutor Keith as an example , even though he is a native speaker , he read some types of
grammar
 in order to improve
speaking
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 frequency and without any mistakes in IELTS.
In
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 sum up , through reading has lots of advantages to learners , a few people guess watching foreign programmes is affordable. I strongly believe that improving language skills via reading is
exiting
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 and
motivated
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.
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