With increasing populations and ever growing urban centers, many countries are losing their natural beauty spots. What are benefits of protecting places for natural beauty spots? How can it be solved?

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few decades, there has been a massive growth
of
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population all over the world.
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has invaded
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portion of under-developer
areas
thus
destroying the natural places within.
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the optimum proportion of urban and rural
areas
of
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all countries
are
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becoming inappropriate with time.Protecting
such
part of nature is very essential and every individual residing in towns must take part in it.
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in population has
lead
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to expanding of borough
centers
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.
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,
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for
proper
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job and proper schooling is
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necessary
neccessary
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necessary
for every individual.Cities are well
equiped
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equipped
with many educational hubs and job
centers
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.
However
,
for
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maintainence
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maintenance
of proper lifestyle, preserving greeneries within the
city
is very
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necessary
neccessary
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necessary
.The park and lakes
makes
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the inner-
city
more beautiful.Many pediatric and geriatric
population
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populations
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can come and do
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exercise
exersice
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exercise
or yoga or play
amongst
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the
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nature.Having
such
activities within small houses are not possible.
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without greeneries
also
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effects
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the mental health of the inhabitants residing there.Only work and no activities will make their life depressing.On a contrary,
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and animals living in
such
areas
will be homeless.
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,Koala bears in Australia has almost decreased
more
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than 70% in
last
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few years.Various reports
has
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claimed that it is mainly due to the growth and expansion of residential
areas
and trade centres
in
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the continent.
Therefore
,a major initiative must be taken by
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government
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govermebt
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government
to reduce
cutting
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of trees and deforestation for making newer buildings.Afforestation and awareness
for
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preserving nature must be taught in schools and educational institutes.All architecture of
city
buildings including residential
areas
,colleges and corporate buildings must include gardens and plantations.
The urban
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planners must keep
in
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mind while planning for
a
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city
development.
Finally
,it can
concluded
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that we all have a role in making
this
world a better place to live.
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