some people think that the teenagers should concentrate on all subjects at school. Others beleive that teenagers should focus on the subject they are best or they are most interested are most interested in. To what extent do you agree?

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true that everyone has their own
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of interest and an individual will more likely to prefer to learn
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, while some others tend to give more
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in their teen life. I strongly agree that in teenage, people should definitely learn all
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level of schooling brings general
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,which may eventually give them
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to select their future studies with vast opportunities.
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a pupil
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to choose their 11 th grade groups like CS maths, Bio maths, commerce etc. So the
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scored in all
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and overall
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his future grade.
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in higher secondary level
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is calculated for college admission. If a student
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ample
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in his desired
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may end up getting
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of eligibility to receive admission in college or his or her choice may be less would be
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should give equal importance to all
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in their young age to
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succeed
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