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Some people think that the government should provide funding for arts. Others,
however, believe that the money should be spent on public health and education. Discuss
both these views and give your own opinion.

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People
 are divided on
government
 financing arts. Some
people
 believe the
government
 should finance the arts, but others think that the money would be better spent on healthcare and
education
. I personally believe that the
government
 must give at least some funding to
art
.
First
 of all,
art
 is a crucial part of cultural
education
. There are many paintings and sculptures that have a historical background. Looking at them we can better understand how
people
 lived in the past, and what they believed in. In some paintings, there can be found hidden messages that depict cultural, political and religious movements.
In addition
,
government
 financing can help new artists. For beginner artists who don't have any popularity, it can be hard to get recognition. Fewer
people
 would be willing to go into artistic careers for fear of not having enough money to survive and we could potentially miss out on talented inspiring
people
. In modern society, the general public works nine to five jobs in offices and
art
 can be their escape into a more
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 world. Many
people
 listen to music while commuting or watch movies and plays in their free time and without artists that wouldn’t be possible. Funding
art
 can help spread knowledge and open up more career possibilities.
However
, basic human needs should come above everything. It's more important to keep
people
 alive than to make them happy. The deceased can't enjoy
art
.
People
 should get free healthcare when they need it.
Education
 is
also
 important,
art
 can play a part in that. Every society needs healthy, intelligent
people
 to thrive. To conclude,
people
 might have divided opinions, but
art
, health and
education
 need each other.
Government
 should give funding to funding to
art
, but it must not be at the expense of healthcare and
education
.
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