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some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your opinion.

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Introduction
Change is welcomed by a few as it gives a feeling of adventure whereas some
people
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 prefer doing the same
things
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 and avoiding change. I agree with the
first
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 statement because change is the
future
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. The following essay will discuss both points of view and substantiate my opinion.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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 with, some
people
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 keep doing the work they have been doing all their life. They say it is something they have expertise in.
moreover
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, they feel it is easy and brings them satisfaction.
For example
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, my friend who ran a hotel business for a decade did really well in the beginning.
However
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, the customers got bored with the same menu they were serving. Ultimately, he had to bring about new changes.
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 , though repeating the same
things
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 can make us feel satisfied because we are good at it, in the long run, it may not be beneficial.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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,
people
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 find trying new
things
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 to be adventurous.
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, a new activity might become a
future
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profession
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.
For instance
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, I came across a story on social media of a food blogger who
initially
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 started making videos just for the love of food, but later it became his
profession
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.
Moreover
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, now he is making a good amount of money. It is a clear example of passion
meets
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that meets
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profession
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the profession
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.
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, indulging in new
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 gives a sense of thrill to
people
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 and can become a livelihood for some.
Conclusion
In conclusion ,
although
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 repeating the same
things
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 might give a sense of satisfaction , in the
future
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 , it might become boring .
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 , trying new
things
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 is adventurous and can turn out to be a
future
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profession
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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