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Some people say that distance learning is a quick and effective way to study. Others, however, disagree and say that distance learning programs can never be as good as courses taken in person. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

#people #distance #study #programs #courses #person
Distance
 learning
programs
 have become a very popular option for many
students
 these days.
However
, it does not match the tacit learning benefits and networks that
students
 build through
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in person
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 learning. Even though
distance
 learning
programs
 are trying to overcome the gap that exists through monthly meetups, it is proving to be insufficient.
Distance
 learning might be a good way to study to develop
basic
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 understanding
regarding
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 a subject, but is insufficient for inculcating an advanced and practical understanding of most concepts. While you may study a topic like economics, complete assignments and give exams. The lively discussion that happens around any topic in a classroom is an integral part of developing a nuanced and holistic understanding of the material. Thereby, even though you may know all the facts regarding a subject, the ability to practically apply the knowledge is gained only through engaging the concepts through case studies and
accomodating
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accommodating
 disparate viewpoints.
Distance
 learning methods currently lack processes which deal with these shortcomings.
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 learning
also
 provides real-time interaction with the faculty, compared to offerings available through
distance
 learning
programs
. It is of utmost importance, that
students
 engage with the faculty to gain the benefits of tacit learning. Most learning is not set in stone and learning to how re-learn existing concepts is the need of the hour.
Consequently
, the process through which knowledge is updated is an art. Learning
this
 skill is not easy and developing a mindset that evolves as the facts change is a very hard task. Concluding the above arguments,
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distance
 learning
programs
 do provide some utility to
students
. It cannot be equated to the learning that happens, though
in class
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 learning.
In
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class
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 learning provides a deeper and
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 grasp of the subject material, which
distance
 learning
programs
 are yet to replicate sufficiently. Thereby,
distance
 learning cannot be as good as
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 learning
programs
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