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It is not necessary for people to travel to other places and learn about their culture. We can learn as much as from books, film and television. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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I used to work as a part-time employee at one office. The problem I can observe is the
organization
’s ability to adopt the technology in use for their work.
For example
, the
organization
 chose to operate its tasks by using manual methods
instead
 of applying software or technology for their work. I know
this
 is a problem because it will be leading to a lack of accuracy in tasks, a lack of speed in customer management, and confusion among their workers because using manual methods may cause different outcomes sometimes.
This
 problem is important because it hinders the ability of the
organization
 to improve their
organization
 to provide to the customers in order to increase their market sales of the
organization
 and gain trust from the customers to use the service from the
organization
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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