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Online learning is not a substitute for book-based learning

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Some
people
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 believe that book-based learning is unnecessary today because
students
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 can easily access learning
information
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 through the Internet. I disagree with
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 view because book-based learning allows access to more specialized types of
information
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 and it is very important for
students
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 to learn in a quiet environment.
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 and foremost Long-term online reading can be harmful to young
people
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's physical and mental
health
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.
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 as an actor in recent years,
myopia
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 rates among young
people
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 have been on the rise in the country; To be more specific, Reliance on electronics leads to
vision
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 loss in the young.
people
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 and When reading online, dealing with a constantly flickering screen and filtering out others. distractions can easily drain mental resources, In ,addition Constantly looking at the blue light from screens can be hard on the eyes over time. While it is not often perceptible, most screens flicker at a high
rate
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 which can cause visual and sensory fatigue. At the same time, the number of young
people
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 suffering from
vision
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 problems is rising
year
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 by
year
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, and the
vision
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health
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 problems of young
people
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 are now becoming more and more seriously! A study by the World
Health
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 Organization shows that there are 600 million
myopia
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 sufferers in China, and the
myopia
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rate
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 among teenagers is the highest in the world. The
myopia
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rate
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 among high school and college
students
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 has exceeded 70% and is increasing
year
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 by
year
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, and the
myopia
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rate
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 among
students
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 is approaching 40%. Learning at the expense of
vision
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health
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 is more than worth the cost. Some individuals
claims
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 that The era of books has passed, replaced by e-books, and more
information
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 from online sources, but I want to reiterate that the Internet is full of
information
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, both good and bad, online
knowledge
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 is not vetted, and it is difficult for us to know right and wrong, but the
knowledge
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 in books is strictly vetted, and are the essence of
knowledge
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. In the end，each coin has two sides，depending on personal considerations.But I strongly believe that travelling to some safe spots is the right thing to do.Book-based learning is better, and it provides a good body of
knowledge
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 and an uninterrupted learning environment.

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