Buying things on the internet, such as books, air tickets, and groceries is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays people are becoming more
relaxing
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, and they do not go outside
for
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shopping they ordered all accessories online and get these articles at their doorstep.
This
trend is increasing day by day. In
this
essay,
the
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both pros and cons will be discussed in the following subsequent paragraphs.
To begin
with, there are many advantages of online shopping but a little
bit
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few
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disadvantages as well.
Firstly
, if someone is buying things
such
as clothes,
machinary
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machinery
, and
stationary
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stationery
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online
then
it is very time saving if you ordered the accurate article at
spot
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the spot
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.
However
, many people just waste their precious time
in
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scrolling and seeing details of shoes and
ready to wear
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ready-to-wear
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garments but they do not
purchased
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anything.
For instance
, most times I just took
a screenshots
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a screenshot
screenshots
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of dresses which I saw on
website
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the website
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but I did not have enough money
for
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pay, and in
this
way
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I was not able to
bought
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buy
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and
wast
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waste
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my hours.
Therefore
, a time limit should be considered for online shopping.
Secondly
, there are many brands and original websites of malls like metro and emporium and they delivered
high quality
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material.
On the other hand
, these days a lot of local companies
which
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are providing damaged books and expired food which is a big drawback of online purchases.
Thirdly
, a positive point of buying through
internet
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the internet
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is that anyone can pay
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the bill
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bill
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bills
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with help of
the
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card at the moment of checkout. In a nutshell, everything
have
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benefits and losses. In
this
modern era, everyone is using fast methods of doing acts.
Nonetheless
, I really used online shopping and it is very convenient.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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