Being a celebrity – such as a famous film star or sports personality – brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

Nowadays with the advancement in technologies and daily upgrading
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media, celebrities’ life is easily reachable to us. We can see their daily routines, their lifestyle, their thoughts, and their whereabouts on the internet. Due to
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we feel very much connected to our favourite celebrity. It
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fame and
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. As we all know fame brings both benefits and problems.
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it feels great to become a star of a Bollywood movie
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to handle the
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about yourself.
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it feels great to see the crown getting mad over to take one photograph with you, other
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the same crowd can harm you. According to me, it brings more benefits than problems. If a person can learn
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fame and problems, he/she can take out more benefits
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, In an episode of Koffee with Karan where the guests were the Indian cricketers Hardik Pandya and K L Rahul. They both went into
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controversy for saying too much, which created the problem for
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them as a celebrity. As they
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with great responsibilities. Being a celebrity is a benefit when handled responsibly.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Public scrutiny
  • Intrusive
  • Endorsements
  • Sponsorships
  • Financial security
  • High-profile collaborations
  • Social influence
  • Philanthropic efforts
  • Trust issues
  • Mental health challenges
  • Substance abuse
  • Pressures of celebrity
  • Expectations
  • Disconnect from reality
  • Normalcy
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