Some parents believe that children should have educational activities in their leisure time as part of their recreation; otherwise, it is just a waste of time for children. What do you think of this notion? Explain with advantages and disadvantages.

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It is always a bonus when one activity has the capability to offer double benefits, and

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viewpoint stands true for children’s leisure time

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delivers educational benefits as well.

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concept of amalgamating education with recreation is drawing the interest of not just parents but

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academicians, who believe that the absence of learning while playing makes the whole experience pointless. By the same token, I feel every child’s activity must have some educational value as a takeaway.

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supported by the examples of the internet game Pokemon, which aims at imparting analytical and strategic learning.

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Some parents believe that children should have educational activities in their leisure time as part of their recreation; otherwise, it is just a waste of time for children. What do you think of this notion? Explain with advantages and disadvantages.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

Music is played in every society and culture in the world today. Some people think that music only brings benefits to individuals and societies. Others, however think that music can have a negative influence on both. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The nuclear family is well developed to move geographically due to its size. Do you think children benefit in any way from moving? Do you think advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Countries with a long average working time are more economically successful than those countries which do not have a long working time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?