Universities should allocate the same amount of money to their sport activities as they allocate to their libraries. Do you agree or disagree?

Yes, I do feel that
universities
should have an equal budget for their libraries as well as {tooltip}_{end-link}for{end-tooltip}
sport
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sports

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activities
. It is our general belief that a good player can not be {tooltip}_{end-link}"a" is missing here{end-tooltip} good student and
hence
we restrict our children’s
sport
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sports

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activities
at
college
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the college

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level.
Moreover
, an academic degree has much more value than
sport
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sports

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activities
which naturally compels students to focus more on their studies than
their
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on their

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interest in
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the sport

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sport
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sports

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. Most of the
universities
keep sports at {tooltip}
last
number{end-link}the bottom{end-tooltip} of their priority list, {tooltip}because of which{end-link}
therefore
{end-tooltip} good players do not get enough facilities and {tooltip}equipments{end-link}equipment, because it is an uncountable noun{end-tooltip} to improve their skills and eventually they {tooltip}loose{end-link}lose{end-tooltip} their interest.
Universities
can play {tooltip}_{end-link}"a" is missing here{end-tooltip} substantial role in shaping
this
upcoming talent by providing good trainers and {tooltip}
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment

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{end-link}equipment
,
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because it is an uncountable noun{end-tooltip} which is
otherwise
too expensive to afford.
Also
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,Also

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it will attract other students {tooltip}towards{end-link}to{end-tooltip} sports and inculcate
importance
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the importance

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of physical fitness in them.
Universities
should produce {tooltip}genious{end-link}geniuses{end-tooltip} in all fields rather than only concentrating on
progress
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the progress

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of scholars.
Hence
, I feel that
universities
should allot equal amounts of money to {tooltip}liabrary{end-link}libraries{end-tooltip} as well as
sport
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sports

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activities
.
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