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Some people believe that giving longer prison sentences is the best way to reduce crime. Others believe that there are better ways to reduce crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #prison #sentences #crime
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Legislation is important in our world. People that live in their own country must follow and in different country different
law
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 so, you have to read and understand their
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law
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laws
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 carefully. In
this
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essay
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,essay
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 I will elaborate
my
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on my
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 opinion to reduce
crime
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 and
longer
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whether longer
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prison
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sentences
senteces
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sentences
 can decrease
crime
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 or not.
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 with, the other
way
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 to reduce
crime
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before
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is before
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 you become a prisoner. The important thing to teach people
to
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apply
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know
a good or bad things
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a good or bad thing
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 is education. People can learn from school and
home
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at home
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.
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, when your children in
home
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a home
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 with
parents
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your parents
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, it is their job to teach them. Which behaviour they can do and
cannot
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what cannot
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 do in
social
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 and what is
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the result
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result
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results
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 they will get if they have done wrong
and
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or
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 right
.
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, when your children watch series, dramas, or tv programs with you. You should give your
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opinion
oppinion
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opinion
 or discuss
with
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it with
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 them as well to know what are they thinking while watching live
actions
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action
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.
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,
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a study
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study
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studying
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 from school is primary as well.
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The teacher
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Teacher
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Teachers
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 must
to
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apply
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teach them etic and legislation in college to help them
understanding
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understand
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 why
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law
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the law
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 is important in our
life
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lives
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 and what punishment
if
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is if
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 you do
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a thing
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thing
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things
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 wrong against
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law
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the law
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. In
additional
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, every college has
rule
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rules
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 itself
and
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that
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 all students must
follow
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themfollow
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. If they
are not follow
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are not following
are not followed
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, they will get
punish
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punished
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thus
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, students must
to
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apply
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read
rules
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the rules
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 carefully and no one cannot excuse
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them that
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that
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them
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 they do not know the rule.
In
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 the other
way
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, longer
prison
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 sentences
is
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are
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 the
way
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 to reduce
crime
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 but it is not the best
way
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. In my
perspective
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 the best
way
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 to reduce
the
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apply
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crime
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 is
come
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to come
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 from what they
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learnt
lernt
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learned
 when they were young from
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school
shcool
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school
 and family. In part of
prison
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 sentences are just to resolve
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crime
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a crime
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 after you have done
the
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apply
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it and will not do
again
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it again
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 after you release from
prison
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.
For
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this
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 situation will be what you get punishment in
prison
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 and it will very suffer. But it
is not guarantee
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is not guaranteed
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 that you will not do
illegal
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the illegal
an illegal
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thing
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things
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 again. In conclusion,
a
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the
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 main reason to reduce
crime
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 is the
way
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 they
lernt
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learnt
 when they
young
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are young
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thus
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, it is
important
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an important
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 thing that parents and
teacher
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teachers
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 should
taught
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teach
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.
Furthermore
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, providing longer
prison
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 sentences should depend on what
prisoner
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prisoners
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 do, some of them should not have a chance to
relase
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release
.
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