Many young people spend a lot of time on the Internet without any parental supervision or control. What are some of the problems caused by unrestricted use of the Internet and what can be done to curb these problems?

Internet
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The Internet

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has played an important role in our lives since it was invented in 1983.
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,
beside
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some advantages, it brings several negative
impact
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especially
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to young people who use almost their
time
on it without parental management. In
this
essay, I am going to mention some issues caused by using
Internet
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the Internet

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closely; and
then
suggest some solutions to deal with those
problems
. Spending a lot of
time
without any parental control causes many
problems
. One major issue is
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a tendency
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for teenagers to play computer games for hours and neglect their studies. If they stay up late, they will have
troubles
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getting up
in
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the
next
morning for
schools
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school

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or
universities
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university

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. Another issue is
health
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a health

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problem
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problems

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because of sitting down in front of
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computer

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computer’
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computer

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screens all day. If young people waste so much
time
online and do no
exercises
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exercise

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,
this
can lead to overweight, eye
strains
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strain

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and health
problems
.
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,
cyber crime
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is more and more increasing. Posting
photo
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photos

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onto
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on

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Facebook, you can lose your privacy or contacting strangers on social networking sites can bring you dozens of
problems
. There are several actions that could be taken to eradicate the
problems
mentioned above.
Firstly
, a simple solution would be to increase outdoor activities. Parents should allocate their
time
to go out with their children. Being
outdoor
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not only
help
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them leave their computers far away
,
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apply

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but
also
improve their health. A
second
measure would be for governments to boost network security to protect users. In conclusion, frequent use of the Internet may take young people many serious
problems
, but
this
can be tackled by effective parental control.
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