Some people think parents should not encourage to do a part time job to what extend do you agree or disagree with this view.
Parents
are guardians of their children
. Of course
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,course
parents
always want the best for their kids. Some people believe that parents
should not support their kids into having part-time jobs. It is obviously disagreed
that Change to the active voice
obviously disagrees
has obviously disagreed
parents
should encourage their children
to do a
part-time Remove the article
apply
work
while having their studies because it can loosen someone
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someone's
focused
on their education and decrease their academic performance.
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focus
to begin
with, a part-time job can distract someone when they should have been studying. For instance
, people with jobs can be more comfortable doing their work
than finishing homework because of the money they get to earn. In addition
, the time and energy also
can be driven to the job instead
of studying. For that reason, It would not be supportive of their studies if parents
encourage their kids to do a part-time activity.
secondly
, having to work
and study at the same time would need a person to have the ability to maintain the time that they have to do both properly. For example
, someone could lose their focus in class for the abundance of work
. If a student cannot focus on their academics, it can possibly ruin their reports eventually. Therefore
, parents
should support their children
to focus on their academics instead
of their job.
In conclusion, regarding parents
' financial ability to support their kid's learning. I believe that any parents
would want their children
at their best performance at school that is
why education must come first
for parents
to encourage so that they hopefully can succeed in their lives.Submitted by syahriar on
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