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Space research costs billions of dollars. Some people think that the money should be invested on more practical projects here on th earth. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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Many
people
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 believe that the
money
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 used in
space
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 research can invest in more beneficial projects. There are others who firmly argue that exploring
space
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 is more important for the
world
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. Mankind always had a big interest the
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,
therefore
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, they have been developing many aircraft and robots to understand the concept. I partly agree with the idea. I will explain that we can reduce the amount of
money
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 which is required for exploring.
Firstly
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, in the
world
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 today
people
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 are very eager to live in
space
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 because of circumstances we face on the earth
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 as climate change and war. It helps to figure out not only the
world
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 but
also
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 the
space
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. After
world
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 war
second
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, many scientists and governments tried to find a convenient way to set off to
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 but especially to the moon.
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, these all efforts turned out a big notion for them
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 as race.
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 they had to meet the needs with extra investments which require billions of dollars.
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, Building up a new
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 rocket need extra resources which are allocated by the government. As we are exploring
space
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, we don’t even know under the oceans of the
world
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. Some areas and species which may be important for us are not explored by
people
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, so the
money
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 can be used on cancer remedy projects. Humanity can try to develop effective strategies to manage it, so
money
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 is a main contributing factor to it.
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,
money
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 can provide a solution to a lot of poor countries to foster their
people
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. In conclusion, there is a thin line between the allocated
money
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 which is important because some of the problems are more serious than
space
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 research but that perception doesn’t happen overnight.
Although
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 the government has to invest in mandatory areas, we have to take account into the advantages of
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 exploration.
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